Honest Opinions On This Original Song.?


it's not bad, guitar quite good, singing. lyrics need work, rhyming pattern weak , actual words better not bad @ all.

edit; no lyrics don't have rhyme i'm talking pattern. think you've got there need think need rearrange it, needs structure. @ moment drifts 1 line next, song needs direction or listener not become engaged.

i wrote these lyrics. not me singing. opinions?
thankyou.

http://youtu.be/g5nst7-qjuq


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