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it’s 5:45pm , laid there beautifully; skin toned over; phone in hand. asleep.
“marilyn… marilyn” gloria, marilyn’s mother called. marilyn’s eyelids opened release bright blue eyes; blue sapphires. marilyn stretched body out , how tall was. “marilyn!” gloria exclaimed sounding angry. “i’m coming mother. give me second have been sleeping, let me wake myself please” marilyn croaked.
marilyn sat long legs dangling bed got , ambled door grabbed long pink gown slipped on, marilyn waking senses getting stronger smell freshly cooked crispy roast potatoes , freshly cut beef marilyn scurried kitchen dinner table food pulling magnet. perfect dinner laid out.
marilyn had big smile on face. “which 1 mine mother?” marilyn giggled. marilyn’s mother pointed @ place laid on right side of table marilyn ambled place @ table, took white painted wooden chair , pulled out marilyn went sit down father came behind , pulled chair away swiftly “wash hands young lady, `would have got slipper round head not washing hands in days think lucky!” marilyn’s father warned marilyn. “yes father” marilyn sighed. marilyn scuffled on sink pulled white sleeves elbows, marilyn took soap pump hand , pushed down watching soap drizzle out of hole onto soft skinny hands, marilyn frothed gooey soap on hands until see frothed soap. “please may turn tap on me mother?” marilyn asked politely. marilyn’s mother came behind marilyn , turned tap on warm. marilyn situated hands underneath warm water; bubbles washed away hot water on ice. marilyn shook clean hands took tea towel , dried them. after went accompany parents @ dinner table.
@ dinner table marilyn , parents said grace while holding hands , closing eyes. after grace marilyn’s father nodded; gesturing ‘you may eat’ marilyn took knife , fork penetrated fork roast potato , cut it; hot steam came roast potato making marilyn’s stomach rumble. marilyn cut beef eat roast potato, marilyn put both beef , roast potato mouth; made marilyn’s mouth water. “this dinner scrumptious mother. thank you” marilyn assured mother.

here- it’s 5:45pm , laid there beautifully; skin toned over; phone in hand. asleep. “marilyn… marilyn” gloria, marilyn’s mother called. marilyn’s eyelids opened release bright blue eyes; blue sapphires. marilyn stretched body out , how tall was. “marilyn!” gloria...

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