My sister was abused by our father. (Help me with poetry?)?

wrote poem sister, strong spirit,
, pretty pretty can (that, i'm of little jealously).
want hard criticism, honest -don't hold back; because want better, , come recognizing flaws in poetry.



"what father means me"

girls loved father,
me? had no love mine.

girl cry dead father,
me? wouldn't mind.

father drink, , mix cocaine pot,
that's kind of father sister got.
still young , ten,
had known now, would've had end.

didn't know praying in bed,
didn't know wanted me there, got him instead.
didn't know threw on floor,
didn't know why father closed door.

after father left room,
went in, seeing eyes of gloom.

naive being kid,
naive not knowing father did.

next thing did of no wrong,
gave warmth, , told strong.

but, understand nightly cries.
and, understand because of father , lies.

i wrote poem sister, strong spirit, , pretty pretty can (that, i'm of little jealously). want hard criticism, honest -don't hold back; because want better, , come recognizing flaws in poetry. "what father means...

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