A late late birthday wish, will you assess this poem, c/c, please?


trumpet sounds (the brass needs polishing,)
rest of band couldn't come.
, i, twirler of birthday batons,
feeling quite remiss , dumb.

may days late,the verse may not scan,
sentiment true , heartfelt.
dave,, happy birthday me you-
may next hand 4 aces dealt.

difficult questions remain-
how fast might poem disappear?
, how many times angel wings
without shedding tear?

indifferent little pinpricks
of 1 another's pain, used feel,
go on our seperate schticks.
ah, magic real....

a trumpet sounds (the brass needs polishing,) rest of band couldn't come. , i, twirler of birthday batons, feeling quite remiss , dumb. may days late,the verse may not scan, sentiment true , heartfelt. dave,, happy birthday me you- may next hand be...


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