What can be improved on this short poem? Racing Days?


nice go spin. wheeeeee!

i'm not sure can improved, there few words remove, yet there , can smell petrol.

perhaps improve making set other memories of youth. make bookend such set.

thank you.

wooden bleachers,
chicken wire fences,big tires,
hey,a bump,spin,crash,
maybe deadly fire.
ole sol,hamburgers,
french fries,also candy,
on sundays,years ago,
racing sure dandy.

,,,tbo,,, bye...


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