Can someone critique my love poem?


girlfriend likes poetry , wanted write something. noot being skilled @ poetry came with. can few critiques? you'd change or add or anything.


when eyes
perfection's see
they're more wonderful
when they're looking @ me

see way smiles
makes me wanna stare
gorgous smile
nothing can compare

it's not outside
heart warm , sweet
makes me feel happy
every time meet

when hold hand
, know she's side
can't seem
these stomach butterflies.

amazing
beauty head toe
nothing stands out more
beauty of soul

so girlfriend likes poetry , wanted write something. noot being skilled @ poetry came with. can few critiques? you'd change or add or anything. when eyes perfection's see they're more wonderful when they're...


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